Agent851 v ShortMonkey v MaliciousAngel
Topic: A day in the life of Edgar Allan Poe
1 day to write
2 days thereafter to vote
Failure should push you until success can pull you.
It's probably not that good, especially with the specific topic, and I've been out of it lately, but anyway here's my poem I guess. I hope it doesn't suck too bad.
I was wandering around one day,
When a picture blew my way.
I remebered something dark,
Something not that good.
But something lit a spark,
And I remebered what I should.
A poet by the name, of Edgar Allen Poe.
Then suddenly all my thoughts-
they all began to flow.
My mind twisted in despair,
The smell of death was in the air.
I closed my eyes only to see,
the world changing around me.
I was in a very defferent place,
Somehow I'd gotten lost in space.
And now I'm here in this guy's shoes-
Able to do what I choose.
I walked around, and bought new clothes,
I went for a stroll, then took a doze.
But instantly I felt weird-
I began to gasp and my eyes teared.
For my life I greatly feared-
I screamed for my only friend,
"Reynolds" over and over again.
Until finally it began to end,
and I stopped calling for my friend.
Then life began to bend-
and I said,
"Lord help my pour soul."
It seems my journey took its toll.
Finally my mind slipped,
and I woke up from that bad trip.
I'm on the iceberg and I reached the tip,
Man, I'm not doing any more of that shit.
Seems that this battle is over. Closed ;/
Failure should push you until success can pull you.
It was a close call, but in the end my vote goes to ShortMonkey.
But in all seriousness, MaliciousAngel, you don't need to be self-conscious. You're under a pseudonym and no one is judging!
Pro: I was very engaged with the narrative. I was drawn in by the fast action and sensory descriptions. It kept me interested till the end!
Con: I found the constantly changing rhyme scheme to be distracting, especially the five consecutive lines that ended friend, again, friend, end, blend.
Anyways, congrats on winning!
