Breathing Barnacles

[Athlas]

Breathing barnacles

I breathe velvet barnacles
A gift of music for the jester king
While the government is in a sad state
Of near-dementia

I show Kate her pancreas
A gift of words for a blind penguin
Where the cavemen, as of late
Fiddle catatonia

I drain another dream or two
A gift of lies for the man in blue
Whose policemen chop up Russians
For their pyromania

I shave dentist labourers
A gift of hurts from our home-grown flue
With cutting edges to surprise
Even the illiterate

Who cannot even read the
Time
To fight the power

I breathe velvet barnacles
And it hurts...

[LiveBreatheTom]

Very well done, an interestingly odd poem, but completely enjoyable. I haven't much to say beyond that, but I felt that the poem deserved some kind of praise.

[TreasurePlanet]

i also like this poem.
it's very visual, but it seems random and that makes it abstract.
it seems almost to abstract and random.
there's no structure.
some of the lines are really great though

[Athlas]

At 4/12/10 07:06 PM, LiveBreatheTom wrote: Very well done, an interestingly odd poem, but completely enjoyable. I haven't much to say beyond that, but I felt that the poem deserved some kind of praise.

Thanks!