I do have to admit that it is a rather good song. The comments below really managed to set the theme, and to be frank it was rather inspiring.
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Been playing with this one throughout the year. Have had a bunch of people in my life this year often tell me they were wanting to work on themselves.
It made me think of the sci-fi trope of the Robot/Cyborg that wished to be rebuilt into a better working model; the whole "upgrade myself because I'm not good enough right now" and how many people take that mindset in both a positive and negative fashion. I tried to have that idea in mind when I was making this, with a pseudo plot of the bot wishing to change.
Celudoc responds:
Yay! thanks!
Celudoc, music composer and author, of Rebuild Me, composed this musical piece to tell a story about a robot/cyborg that "wished to be rebuilt into a better working model" (Celudoc).
Pros: 00:00 - 00:45, is the definitely my favorite part of the musical piece. It spins the idea we're being introduced our robot "friend", and (he) is not coming to acceptance of his current model.
Pros: 00:45 - 01:42. I vividly imagine our robot friend in a montage of upgrading his parts, and learning what works, and doesn't till he is satisfy with his upgraded model.
Pros: 001:42 - 03:22, At this point of our story, the robot has experimented with his new model, seeing where he fits in socially, and goes through a series of struggle, but never gives up.
Cons: 03:22 - 05:48, I lost interest in story-telling as the musical piece starts to sound the same, and doesn't bring in any new/interesting points. Falls flat.
Overall, the beginning of the musical piece (00:00 - 00:12), reminds me of early sci-fi music, as you stated in your comments. It becomes light-hearted after the 00:12 mark, and definitely captures your style - which I find it to be upbeat, while keeping a serious tone. Expressing your idea of a robot wanting to upgrade, really helps set the mood for the score. Although, others may be free to imagine what they please, I feel it respectable to judge your score based on your idea on creating the song. It's unfortunate you were not able to create any new "interest" points in your musical piece, after 03:22 -- it becomes dull. Besides that, I was able to listen to this around 4-5 times, before getting sick of it. I am open to hear more of your musical pieces in the future, and I hope you keep creating more pieces with elaborate stories.
Celudoc responds:
Wow, thanks for the detailed review! I truly appreciate those.
I see what you mean with 3:22 onward, as it doesn't variate as much as the rest. I was trying to have it end with something more upbeat and faster whilst having a rising climactic finish and i have a guilty pleasure of Drum n bass'y rhythm.
I may give the song a second pass and variate it in the last half better. Many of my submissions will have second versions, since I intend on collecting my better submissions on here into an album for bandcamp, and those that I collect will have a second look (remastering, reworking bits I didn't like or learned new tricks since release) and I'll probably look into an alternate change for that.
Thanks again for the input!
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