This is an official NGADM '19 Review
Lol, it sounds like at 0:11 I'm booting up with an HMD Odyssey. The intro is very floaty and light in a welcoming fashion. I really like the different route you took. More of a narrative in the first half which is pretty unique for this contest. You've put a lot of thoughts into the words, and they feel completely naturally and nothing is forced. Hey cool, I just noticed that the pencil is actually erasing at 1:07, nice details. 1:40 also has a very unique rhythm (although I probably wouldn't have noticed it too much if LunacyEcho didn't point it out lol). I don't know if I quite agree with the last section being so chord based, but it still worked with the feel of the rest of the song.
Production and Sound Design:
Really great stuff. Your voice is really well produced, but it also fits the feel very well. Honestly, really good vocal work. You picked just the right instruments and percussion for the middle section. So well thought out. However, the third section I think is the weakest in the song. I get what you're doing, but I think it needs to be a little bigger and louder. Mostly the louder part. It feels like it's supposed to be really climatic, but the volume dynamics being quieter than the section just before makes the listener feel conflicted if this is actually supposed to feel climactic or a hushed and building ending. If it's meant to feel confusing, it's a neat idea, but maybe could have been more defined. I also feel like it's a bit too dry. I like the cutoffs that drop to nothing, but it just seems a little too awkward I think. The last section probably took up the most, but only because compared to how close to perfect the other sections were I was a little dissapointed. It did not ruin the song at all though.
It almost feels too short with the second and third sections, and not to slam the third section too much, but the ending feels disjointed a little from the rest of the song. However! I really enjoyed how this flowed together. I just noticed the reversing notes in the 1:13 section (nice touch) and for the most part everything feels like it's the same theme even though the first two sections have a really large contrast. The second section though was really greatly put together since it clearly references to the chaotic rhythm mentioned in the narrative. It's also why I can understand what you're doing with the third section. While it feels a little alien, it heavily articulates the narrative and conveys the right emotions that you were making in this piece. Like I can feel what you were trying to write.
Emotion / Conclusion:
This is definitely one of my favorites for this round. Really creative for a contest setting, and does a really good idea with the theme of the whole song. Everything from the title, to the narrative, the instruments selected, and how the structure is organized. Everything is really well thought out and works (for the most part) cohesively to the main idea, even to the point that I could just about feel the emotions driving the theme forward (why I rated emotion pretty high on this). Again, I don't exactly agree with how you did the third section, but I enjoyed every second of it.
Sound Design: 9.5