I thought it was great up until 00:57 when the synth came in to offset the static drumbeat. It changed the tone of the song, then the synth music overtook the industrial portion entirely. The first fifty seconds were good for industrial but I feel like the trade-off killed it. I'd listen to it for hours without the synth. A lot of your industrial songs do that I've noticed, Martial Law is your best one in my opinion, though I haven't given all of your industrial songs a listen yet. A pure example of industrial music is hard to find.