Ha I can definitely relate on multiple levels. I really enjoyed this track. 😆👊🏼

it's cool ig

This is really cool! I love the instruments behind the lyrics (which are funny and sad at the same time), they sound really nice. I could really see this being at the beginning of a musical. Maybe you should write one lol.

Goddamit whenever I listen to anything lyric related you've ever touched, be it The Chipsical! (Love it)(haha miyo haha garla), be it Rhode Island, it's just a blast, without fail. Your style of writing lyrics and stories is so charismatic and the humor is ALWAYS top notch! In this one, the juxtaposition between the narrative and the mood of the melody is admirable.

I never really like the reverb you use on vocals, it feels too long, at least when paired with the the rest of the layers of the song, but it actually came together in the end when all three bois sang in unison. Somehow...? I dunno exactly why, but having all three I guess makes it so more of the song feels in that space, and thus each individual tail of reverb makes more sense to my ears, if that makes sense?

Anyways, the composition and lyric writing is, as I said, hecking good. I specially like Chester's breakdown. The chords leading up, so damn dissonant, in a fitting way. Big claps for that.

Also, good singing, as usual.

Overall, keep habing fun with this, it shows in the final product :chaps: :chaps:

I like the bouncy vibe at the beginning, and I applaud your use of real instruments to aid the down-to-earth cabaret feel of the piece. I’m consistently jealous of your ability to mix vocals this well, and the comedic elements of the lyrics make the appeal of the vocals that much greater. There’s something vaguely cheesy and/or cliche about the arrangement of the piece in some regards, and I think there’s room for a little more variety in the content of the instrumental tracks. I think this piece is short enough that it could use a solo or harmonic shift in the middle just to spice things up; the structure of the vocal phrases gets pretty repetitive after a while, and part of me feels like it’s a bit too narrative-driven for its own good. That said, you clearly put a lot of creative energy into the lyrics and thematic content, and it pays off. This piece sounds like a conglomerate of a richly detail-oriented creative process, and it was refreshing to hear several vocalists in a piece in the NGADM. Keep up the good work, LE! ^^

Mixing, mastering, and balance
2/2
Structure, transitions, phrasing, and variety
1.25/1.5
Melody, tonality, harmony, and texture
2/2
Instrumentation and sound design
1/1
Emotion, atmosphere, and catchiness
1.5/1.5
Originality and uniqueness
.75/1
Overall (how do the elements above interact?)
.75/1
Composite score
9.25/10