I like the mysterious mood at the beginning and the rich atmosphere. Some of the synths are a bit cheesy, and I also would like to hear more of the synth arpeggios in the mix. Maybe you would consider centering them a bit more instead of panning them so hard to the right? The beat at :44 is really nice, although the texture still sounds pretty minimal, with not a lot of high-mid frequencies or melodies. The kick at 1:50 also sounds pretty treble-heavy. Despite being a little abrupt, the transition at 2:13 works pretty well. I like the mellow melodies at 2:14, although I thought they could’ve been a bit more dynamic. The harmonies of the piece could use more depth at times, and there are long stretches that sound pretty minimalistic. I like the climax at 3:42, although it still doesn’t sound like you properly concluded the piece by integrating a lot of the sub-themes from earlier. Instead, you introduce the strings and piano. The strings also sound a bit over-panned, btw. I’d encourage you to look into stereo widening a bit more instead of panning - it helps clean up your mix without things sounding lopsided in a thin texture. Overall, I think you played the composition a bit safe here, but I like the mood, progression, and rhythmic content. Keep at it, L-E-R-U-O! :)

Mixing, mastering, and balance
1.25/2
Structure, transitions, phrasing, and variety
1/1.5
Melody, tonality, harmony, and texture
1.5/2
Instrumentation and sound design
.5/1
Emotion, atmosphere, and catchiness
1.25/1.5
Originality and uniqueness
.5/1
Overall (how do the elements above interact?)
.75/1
Composite score
6.75/10

I really like the melody at the beginning! Actually, I like the melodies overall here!

Isn't most of the song a bit too quiet when compared to the percussion?

I love the melody at 2:14!

I don't really have much to say, 'cause I, myself, don't really enjoy it much. From a more objective point of view though, I think this a pretty good song! :)