I like the orchestral parts of this piece. I think you should have worked around these like having a very short intro (shorter than yours), stretching the orch. parts out and putting some spice on it throughout the track f.e more strings, new intruments/synths and more variation on the melody since they get repetitive after a short time.
However there are still elemets I really enjoy and I can see alot of potential here like the before mentioned orchetral parts, the percussion is really cool especially near the end around 2:15 as well as the end itself which makes sense in the title you gave it.

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i liked it, it's a little repetitive tho.