I like the sound design at the beginning and the rhythmic content. There’s a lot going on in the texture, and it can be pretty overwhelming at times. The composition might need a stronger sense of direction, and it feels like there are a lot of transitory moments in this piece. At some point, I wanted a little more stability in the texture and some melodic content I could really fully grasp as a listener. Most elements of the mix are really fleeting here, and the fast pace of progression makes that really jarring at times. The composition and arrangement of the piece feel really experimental, but I do like the rhythmic content and instrumentation. This piece has me really torn. On the one hand, the piece doesn’t really have a coherent sense of direction, climax, or resolve, and I’m a pretty big stickler for those kinds of overarching structural considerations. I also thought the panning could be a tad too heavy at times. On the other hand, the production quality is solid, the atmosphere is tasteful, and the sound design is so cool and refreshing it should be a new Gatorade flavor. Overall, you certainly earned a scout and a mental note of mine to check out more of your music later, but I still think you need to do more to earn more points in my compositional scoring categories. Keep at it, Donjonneau! :)

Mixing, mastering, and balance
1.75/2
Structure, transitions, phrasing, and variety
.5/1.5
Melody, tonality, harmony, and texture
1.5/2
Instrumentation and sound design
1/1
Emotion, atmosphere, and catchiness
1.25/1.5
Originality and uniqueness
1/1
Overall (how do the elements above interact?)
.5/1
Composite score
7.5/10

Not bad. I like how lively it sounds. Very interesting and not like something I hear a lot.

The song could use more build up. The break at 1:30 is quite nice for example. I wish this song had more parts like that. Other than that it doesn't really have a lot of contrasting segments. It retains about the same energy throughout. I know this is an experimental song and it shouldn't have a pop song structure, but a bit more variety in quieter and louder parts would make this more interesting to listen to. It quickly loses my attention like this.

For an experimental song you choice of instruments isn't that unique. They sound like presets to me, that any random beginner musician would choose. That's the opposite of what you want right? Mixing wise it sounds very dry. Especially the drums. As if you've picked a few presets that already had some effects on them and you did very little to adjust the sounds to make them sit well in the mix. It sounds very computurish this way. With so many people with no music skill or talent being able to make music on a computer these days, you risk being labeled an amateur. So I advice you to be really clear and specific in your own personal style and sound.

I think you could go either 2 ways from here. Program your music like you do now, but make it even dryer, with less effects to emphasize it's computer music and it's a deliberate choice. Or make the sounds more refined and professionally mixed, and play the instruments manually so it becomes more like a minimal experimental jazz style. Either way is fine, as long as the listener is convinced you know what your doing.

I like it when there's a strange rhythm and all of the instruments emphasize it, instead of each doing it's own thing. I think you should focus a bit more on that, because sometimes I hear it, sometimes I don't.

Experimental music is difficult both to create as well as to judge. I think it only works if the musician can convince the audience he/she really knows what he/she's doing, instead of just playing whatever because it's experimental. For that you really need to find your own sound.

Keep working on it!