I like this a fair bit, its right in my ball park. I have to admit though, the japanese harp is distracting. I'd consider a softer instruments, maybe an orchestral pizzicato with a lush verb. At present its clashing with your groove. I like the panning air pad, and the bass compliments your groove nicely. I think it's mixed well but not perfect. In saying that, I can hear the potential in this. A revision of instrument choice, a bit of tlc on verb and eq, I can see this going places.

It's still a 5 regardless

pitbulljones