It is indeed better! Filtering at the beginning is cool, and I think the texture feels a lot more cohesive harmonically at :40 than the original. The section at 1:10 is still a bit rhythmically dense, but it gets easier to follow with repetition. I also like the heavy kick at 2:19, which I didn't notice before in the original. The ending was really cool. Nice work with the panning there. Much smoother track, Echowave! I think the next step might be adding a bit more shape to the overarching structure. Right now, it feels like there's only one direction to the piece as the texture gradually thickens. It could use a bridge or breakdown somewhere in there to add some more contrast and variety. Still, this is a big improvement. Great to see you're so committed to improving your music! ^_^