i feel like the timing could be a tad more on point in the earlier portions of the song
its very catchy and quite interesting to be honest
maybe the drums could use a change here and there too
good song overall yo!
Thanks a lot for the response! It's actually kind of a style I've been experimenting with. I've found that purposefully coming up with "close" rhythms and then building around that causes me to think creatively about the purpose behind the music more, as a sort of corrective mechanism which gives meaning to an otherwise "meaningless" thing. If the "question" posed melodically is already rhythmically correct, then it leaves little work for the the rest of the instrumentation to do in terms of creating a cohesive atmosphere for that distorted voice to live in so to speak.