Orchestral elements here /do/ sound nice. It's the guitar that's lacking. Doesn't sound like they're double-tracked. Kind of hiding in the mix. I'd probably recommend RealEight in place of whatever you've got here. I can tell 2:05 is not a synth. If you didn't commission someone else to record that or play it yourself, I'm not sure why you would chose to synth your rhythm guitars there. Not a serious detractor but does take off a good half star just for guitar mixing/synth. You could probably have gotten away with slapping an amp on a dry cello with a pick sample midi vst the keep the attack clear.

That said, wonderful writing. I found the only thing this piece really lacked aside from what I've already mentioned is some compression to give it the power I know you want to convey.

With epic metal songs I usually notice the orchestral elements having poorer quality. In this instance, I think the guitar was actually the straggler, which was weird. But aside from that, this sounds really nice, especially the different layers. A few musical phrases here and there seemed bland to me, but just as many were interesting. The only other caveat I noticed was the ending seemed very abrupt, almost as though you were rushing to resolve it and just slapped some finale-like sounds into the last few measures.

Great song

To arms!