To elaborate on what that other guy didn't quite say, the instrumental itself isn't too shabby, but the whole thing is kinda missing a low end (bass). The words do feel pretty forced. As a listener, I'm already subject to the lyricist's paranoia by the time the intro ends; so the kinda weird whispering thing is just a little annoying. Maybe do it a couple times at the end? I dunno, nonetheless interesting to listen to.
Author Comments
Track 3 off my new EP "Quiet Time". Download the full EP here: https://nowitsart.bandcamp.com/album/quiet-time
And so we come to my most experimental, complex, longest, and argulably darkest song so far! Full track commentary available on bandcamp.
LYRICS
Sometimes, I feel like I'm not meant for this world, ya know? Like, I don't know, I don't want to die or anything, but sometimes I just really want to not be where I am at that moment in time. I just want to run away. I would never want to die, I've just got so much to live for. Still though, it's hard. It's always so hard...
If I'm dying in the night
I'll put up a fight,
If you want me to.
Please don't make it so,
It's not my time to go,
I've got stuff to do.
If I'm dying in the night
I'll put up a fight,
If you want me to.
Please don't make it so,
It's not my time to go,
I've got stuff to do.
If I'm dying in the night
I'll put up a fight,
If you want me to.
Please don't make it so,
It's not my time to go,
I've got stuff to do.
If I'm dying in the night
I'll put up a fight,
If you want me to.
Please don't make it so,
It's not my time to go,
I've got stuff to do.
If I'm dying in the night
I'll put up a fight,
If you want me to.
Please don't make it so,
It's not my time to go,
I've got stuff to do.
I can't keep this up...
But I have to find the strength,
If I can't I'll go insane.
I've gotta stop listening to my brain,
'Cause it gives me thoughts of pain.
But it's hard to do that,
At least I don't think I'm fat.
Sorry if that made you hurt,
There's way more things that are worse.
This is the part where I start to realize
All of this is just a disguise.
This is the part where I'd talk about my schlong
But instead I'll rip off that song.
This is the part where I would start screaming,
But I must be quiet this evening.
This is the part where I start to transition
So I can find out what's been missing.
If I'm dying in the night
I'll put up a fight,
If you want me to.
Please don't make it so,
It's not my time to go,
I've got stuff to do.
If I'm dying in the night
I'll put up a fight,
If you want me to.
Please don't make it so,
It's not my time to go,
I've got stuff to do.
If I'm dying in the night
I'll put up a fight,
If you want me to.
Please don't make it so,
It's not my time to go,
I've got stuff to do.
If I'm dying in the night
I'll put up a fight,
If you want me to.
Please don't make it so,
It's not my time to go,
I've got stuff to do.
If I'm dying in the night
I'll put up a fight,
If you want me to.
Please don't make it so,
It's not my time to go,
I've got stuff to do.
I can keep this up.
artistunknown responds:
Hmm... I mean, there was bass in there, I guess there just wasn't enough? Idk.
Are you talking about the whispering in general or just the whispering in the intro? I'm going to assume you're talking about the whispering during the chorus being too much since the spoken word in the intro was already whispered. I can see it being too much at least. Idk, I'm not entirely sure what you mean, either I'm just shit at interpreting or I just need things explained more specifically :/
It least you thought it was interesting to listen to though! That's something at least.
The instrumental needs work. Feels like the lyrics is trying to hard to be edgy
artistunknown responds:
I never know what to expect from you when it comes to reviews, lol. I can't help but feel a little disappointed because I feel like you're trying to help but you didn't really offer much in the way of advice, like what specifically about the instrumental needs work? To me it sounds fine.
And the lyrics aren't trying to be edgy, if they were trying to be edgy it wouldn't end on a positive note :p
That's emo for ya though.
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