Nice job so far! I think you got a cool atmosphere going here! Though I do think you could improve a lot, here are my tips:
-Stick to the regular DnB beat, .K___.S___.__K_.S___ (The "." marks the start of a new bar, the underscores are 1 beat)
-Get some more bass in there other than subs, it's clear there is some bass, just not terribly audible in the mixing.
-Improve the mixing, the song is pretty quiet, that often happens from cancellation, I can tell you really wanted room for the bass though! But just be sure to use up that space with louder bass (like growls, etc).
I really like what you got going though! Keep it up man :)
thanks for the response :)