I like the retro vibe and the instrumentation, even if the schmoozy strings and synths were a bit cheesy. Some of the lyrics are a little cliche - you went a little overboard on setting up the wistful aspect of the piece, and also used a lot of generic phrases like “trials and tribulations,” even the title itself: “life’s a bitch.” That said, once you started talking about the violence the narrator was exposed to and/or took part in, it was easier to get into the song. You really start to tell a story with the lyrics in the verses, which is always a plus. I thought the gun FX at 1:25 was a good idea, but it ended up sounded really harsh in the mix the way you incorporated it - it probably just needed to be equalized differently. Still, I’m enjoying the nice, full texture you have throughout the piece. I also thought the piece got a bit repetitive by the end, and the echo effect at the end came across as a bit lazy and cliched. You also could’ve used a breakdown or bridge somewhere in there to add some shape and structural relief to the piece. It has a smooth sense of continuity as it is, but I wanted to see you interrupt that pattern after a while and leave some more space for contrast. Overall, this is admirable work. The harmonies and mastering are strong, and I enjoyed the vocals overall. I think you lost the most points for lacking originality and variety in the texture. Keep at it, guys! ;)
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Great rap track! It has a really nice moody vibe to it, and the beat has quite an emotional feel to it. The sound design, while not perfect, is pretty darn good, and when I try to imagine how this whole song would work with every element perfected, it's a pretty amazing song, which is definitely NOT true of most songs I listen to
Very well done track, gentlemen. Teddy, as usual, keeping it on point with the production.
Vinstigator, I was a bit surprised at the timing of some of your lines. It all flowed really well.
Criticism: The lyrics of the second verse don't seem to match the beat. You go off on a bit of a flexing tangent, which os still topically aligned with the track, but given the similarities between the first half of the second verse and the first verse, the difference in content stood out to me.
Overall killer job guys!
Thanks for the review! The 2nd verse was going to be completely different but I felt that I should fast forward to the present to show that even through my experiences growing up, I still haven't changed. And that my anger is more like a "curse" than a "gift".
Hence the "I'm like John Wick, tried to stay retired, but motherfuckers won't let me, so now I'm hired" and "fulfilling markers till the day I die, couldn't leave this lifestyle, even if I tried" lines. It shows that I can never live a peaceful life no matter how hard I try, because there is always going to be someone out there who pushes me over the edge, hence the continued cycle aka fulfilling markers...
That hook is really good, hits HARD with solid BARS. Your delviery shines on Teddygram's westy coasty af beat . Great work here Vince and Teddy!
Thanks! That's why me and Teddygram make so many dope tracks together. He specializes in West Coast beats and I'm a West Coast Hip-Hop Artist.
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