I much prefer this than the final version. This has more intstrumental clarity. The final version just seems a bit too boisterous as well as being a bit "muddy" if you know what I mean? :)
Garage Band! wow!
Listen to the final version : http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/listen/757297
[The Overture Of Pirate's Long Journey In The Sea]
Get onto the Newground's Pirate Ship with the captain and join in the dangerous, and rough, long voyage across the open sea, for a treasure island.
'The sail is set. The waves are crashing into your big ship. You are standing right on the dock. The smell of salty sea comes to your nose. You breathe in and breathe out. The ship starts its long voyage. Sometimes gently, sometimes roughly, the ship creeks through the open ocean day and night.
Just then, you meet the biggest storm you've never seen before. The ship shakes madly. You are standing at the dock, wobbling as the ship goes back and forth. You feel sick. A splash of rough waves crash through the wall of the ship and drowns you like a rain. Ocean water comes to your mouth. It's salty.
Just then, you see some dark clouds softly moving away, showing a blue sky. The sunlight shines through the dark clouds like a spotlight, showing the treasure island nearby.
"Land ho!" You hear the captain shouting.
With a strike of hope, you gaze at the beautiful island. But it came out only a second. The dark clouds swarms around you once again into the madness of a huge thunderstorm. Lightning flashes. Thunder roars. Heavy rain pours on to you.
Suddenly, the storm dies away. You finally escaped the clouds. Still, grey-colored clouds are in the sky. The ship, much more steady now, still moves towards the island.'
Composed, mixed and story by Jessie Yun
Created with GarageBand (iPhone Version)
I made this just for fun, but if you have any comments/review/advice for this song, I'd love to hear it!
I much prefer this than the final version. This has more intstrumental clarity. The final version just seems a bit too boisterous as well as being a bit "muddy" if you know what I mean? :)
Garage Band! wow!
Hi All-Ears,
Thanks for the review! Seems like that version sounded "messy" in your ears! Well, glad you liked this version! I guess it's really fun to hear people's opinion what's best for them.
Either way, I'm glad you liked this song. I appreciate your comment. :)
I'm actually not sure... I definitely like the beginning. But around 1:07 (where beat appears) it becomes strange and somehow shifts atmosphere from adventurous line. At least from pirate adventure line. Then it becomes all adventurous again around 01:35, but the ending (after 02:17) seems either in too much of minor or too long for the rest of quite energetic track. 4 of 5, I guess
Hi RemileOduen,
Thanks for the advice. I'm now making some more tweaks on the music in a total different atmosphere, will upload the final version soon.
I'll keep your notes too. Anyway, glad you liked the song. Stay tuned! :)
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.