I love the atmosphere at the beginning. The snare seems a bit heavy and loud compared with the relaxed soundscape of the rest of the piece, although I did like the bass line that came in at :34. The progression is really slow, though, and the synth at 1:09 comes in without warning, which is a problem - and you do the same thing at 2:20, 3:45, and 3:53. I also think that at 1:10 the kick loses its distinction in the mix. There are a lot of good ideas here, but I think you could’ve put a lot more effort into the composition. Despite being very atmospheric and flowy, there’s very little phrasing or variety, especially with regards to dynamics or energy levels. I also don’t think it needed to be this long given the few changes in texture throughout, and I definitely don’t think you needed this much reverb in the piece , mostly because of detrimental effects to the mixing (especially during the busier sections). Overall, the composition is a little underwhelming, but the atmosphere, mood, and harmonies are really well done. Keep at it, Rahmemhotep! ;)

7/10  

dang i actually really like this, the whole eternal suffering and anguish thing notwithstanding (ya think you could be a little more gentle with your message pls?). good stuff, great main melody. just turn down some of your reverbs. ;-)