I thought the fade-in was pretty lazy and the instruments at the beginning were really generic. The piece is also mastered VERY quietly - I have my speakers turned up as loud as they can go and the piece is at a standard volume. It’s very slow to progress at the beginning, but I think the bit at 1:06 is quite catchy. The off-beat open hats at 1:21 are cliche, but fit the character of the piece well. You really needed some melodic content in here sooner, though. Otherwise, the piece lacks a strong sense of direction, which is a problem. The piece has a good sense of atmosphere at times, and the mixing and mastering is pretty solid. The composition is definitely the weakest point of this piece - bland and uninspired. I’d encourage you to make a more melody-driven piece, or at least thicken the texture beyond bass-beat-chords for a significant portion of the piece. The piece is still smooth-flowing and has a cool mood, though. Keep at it, man!
Thank you for the response, I'll keep those tips in handy for future pieces. :)
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