I like the tranquil mood at the beginning. The character of the vocals is really amusing, and from what I can hear the lyrics are also fairly good. One thing I think you should work on is adding some structural variety to the piece. It’s just a series of verses, connected by one 10-second riff. There’s a lot more you could’ve done with the composition here. I’d highly encourage you to use the instrumentation to distinguish some sections of your piece as more “important” or passionate than others. With a uniform texture, energy and volume level, this piece could be hard to keep engaging. Overall, I think this has a really clean sound and a cool mood. The weak composition is definitely my main concern. I gave you a scout - use it wisely. ;)

7.5/10

Uhm tasty...