Oh god, this is really nice :) great work, I really want to hear more of your stuff
My first impressions: Simple start, sounds like something you'd hear in an old final fantasy game. (which isn't a bad thing.)
All around: Is diverse enough to hold my attention throughout the whole song. The audio clip of the girl talking was a nice touch. The overall mix sounds acceptable, I feel like the bass get a little off at some points.
Great job! This is awesome man! KEEP MAKING MUSIC!!! :)