The arpeggios at the beginning are kind of dry. I think they needed some more reverb. They also extend way too far into the treble range. The transition at :07 was a little rough, even with the crash. I think you should've faded the part at :07 in while leaving the arpeggios or some other harmonic part in. Then, there's the fact that :07 and :00 sound like completely different songs. Besides that, pacing is an issue. You go for a fast-paced arpeggio-based texture for the first 7 seconds, and then the next 4 minutes have a thicker, drone-like ambient quality. I don't think you need the first 7 seconds in there at all, really. Also, no one could've predicted the silence at 1:49. You need to lead into your transitions so that they're cleaner and smoother. I would suggest using volume automations, crashes, sweeps, or some other sort of drum. No matter what, though, you also need some more reverb, which would make the various sections of this song connect in a much more fluid and predictable way. Furthermore, you change moods too suddenly as well. The section from :07 to 1:49 sounds apprehensive and reflective, and then the chord progression from 1:50 - 2:10 sounds conclusive, even victorious. There's obviously a lot of dissonance and atonality at 2:13, which in itself is not a bad thing, but it still doesn't really fit the mood of the piece very well IMO. Then, the dissonant effects suddenly stopped at 2:40. This piece is EXTREMELY disjointed and lacks structural consideration in the extreme. The texture is also pretty thin considering that it's 4 minutes long. The instrument at 3:51 cuts off way too suddenly as well. Again, you don't need those arpeggios, neither at the beginning nor at the end. They don't feel conclusive enough to serve as a coda. I'm sorry this review is so negative, but, again, you need some drums, crashes, reverb, etc. to smooth over the transitions here. It's extremely choppy and lacks coherence to an extreme. You guys should keep working on this, though - there are quite a few isolated riffs that I liked, despite the minimalism, but the main harmonic parts you build your piece off of NEED to retain similar keys and progression across different sections of the piece. I hope you found this review helpful, guys. Keep working at it! ;)
I loved the Synthesizer in the second half but other than that it was a little too repetitive in the beginning. As far as an ambient score, bravo! But in the compositional sense, I am wondering if you just recorded the first part live with a cheap electric piano or two simple vsts on a midi. Regardless liked the second half, spacey indeed.
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