well, that was nice. Lol!
That's a very heavy and sub-bassy kick you got there. I often try to create two peaks with the kick, one that's in the sub-bass range and another that's around 500 Hertz. Still, I enjoyed the apprehensive mood at the beginning and the dark instruments. That pulsing lead was cool too. The synth that comes in at :41 sounds like it needs to be equalized more. Together with the pulsing lead it sounds really harsh, probably because they both have too many treble tones. The second half of the piece was very repetitive, and the ending was too sudden. This is not a structurally complete piece in my opinion. It only really has one climax, which peaks from around :40 to 2:05. You need some sort of breakdown or re-intro at some point before you create some melodic development and dynamic contrast in the second half of the piece (which you never did). It is a rather smooth-flowing piece, though, and I admire your sense of harmony and progression (despite my complaints about the structure and equalizing). The mixing also isn't that bad. If you account for these complaints, I think you'll have a pretty solid piece. Keep at it, Omnicrown. ;)
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