My friend and I wrote a simple folk song with that same exact verse just recently. Our response in the chorus was Lord Come Soon.
I love your own musical approaches to this stuff as it is certainly different from what I would do. Quite refreshing to hear a different mind.
It can be tough to stay positive all the time with all the stuff that's happening in the world. I turn my eyes and ears to the LORD and think about how we're gettin' outta this place soon. :)
Has a very nice ambient background noise. I quite like the birds actually. The synth seems to play occasional off notes, I'm not really sure if I like it or not, to be honest.. I like the bass part that comes in at :43. I think it's fairly catchy. Especially when you do the goa like drum part. I like the splicing you're doing here. The gross beat is a little weird sometimes, but I'll admit, that's really hard to use. Way to be ballsy and use it though!!!!
Goes through a repeat.
Overall, it's not a bad song, but not super awesome, either. Keep making music man!
And if you could, please come check out my latest work if you get the time!