Things I liked:

-Catchy beat. I enjoy the bones of what's there.
-Overall atmosphere - I like where you're going with this, though the direction could be a little more clear.

Things that could be better:
-It's a bit repetitive, I'd recommend adding some other section with a different chord progression and a clear melody to change things up.
-I get what you were going for with the vocals, but the execution is a bit lacking. Intonation/mixing issues to be looked at.
-The whole mix is very bass heavy, in a way that distorts the rest of the song.
-The loop is a little bit rough - I would try to smooth out the transition.

You've definitely got something you can work with here - don't be afraid to try out some new sounds and head in different directions! Even little things like rotating in new drum sounds throughout a song can add a lot. Best of luck!

This is a really unique sound design you have here. It's catchy and cool, yet it also progresses pretty slowly. I like the chord progression with the choir. I think the melodies at around 1:20 needed to be more up-front in the mix, because that's really the only melodic content you have in the piece. The mood and atmosphere of this piece are awesome: it's energetic and mechanical, yet also dream-like. I think it could function pretty well in certain kinds of videogames. The loop is clean, but I think you at least needed a crash in there to smooth out the transition back to the beginning. I wasn't really prepared for the pads to cut off suddenly when it looped. I really admire your sense of rhythm and harmony, though. This is, overall, pretty admirable work. The mixing is also rather impressive, especially given the dense texture of the piece. Keep up the good work, Kinupsi! ;D

9/10