I like the dramatic buildup, but the first 10-15 seconds are very quiet, I could hardly hear anything and wondered if my headphones were broken xD again at ~42 seconds the sounds drop off and I can barely hear the melody. I like the concept of contrast that you bring to the table between soft + louder sounds, but the soft sounds should be a little louder, and the intro should be a little bit faster paced. I like the swelling horn sounds, and the melody is strong. I feel it could be carried on a little bit longer into a bigger crescendo. I felt that the ending needed a bit more of an "epic" conclusion to it, if that makes any sense. Overall, good work. Keep practicing and working hard!

Cheers,
-ISTW