It definitely has potential, but i feel like all the instruments are fighting to be heard and not blending as well. Choose one or two instruments to be the main focus and put everything else in the background or have come in at only certain sections. The drums could be beefed up a bit too so it gives it that jumpy feel. Just a couple things to work on to make some progress :)
If you could review my song that would help out a lot :D
http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/listen/623311