I enjoyed this quite a bit, a good minimalist track is hard to come by these days it seems.

It's kinda like if Richard D. James and Combichrist had a depressed, obese baby. I like it, but try to see what you can do with it based on bwmusic and limonpower's advice. Or don't.

Reminds me a bit of the stuff I make when I'm experimenting.

Reminds me a bit more of earlier Combichrist B sides (Like off Everyone Hates You) - minimal dark/atmos techno/aggrotech. Or maybe an early cut from The Joy of Gunz (more powernoise)

Personally I don't know why you killed you bass drum with that LPF (or if thats the sample). By having it so muffled, there's virtually no attack from it, just a bass wash. EQ the low end too with the kick and bass, they are competing for the same space but making it bottom heavy and muddy.

The hi hats to me are way too quiet too, also, not sure why they're panned in stereo width. Its common to have em pushed to one side or the other by about a couple hours (+/- 30-40 in the left or right), but often in techno they're pretty center (but then become over bearing and you really create an I or W mix often)

Agreed with the other poster; a little variety would be nice. Melody or even just pads that wash in. This is a very lower frequency friendly track, but there really isn't anything higher frequency, and it would benefit a lot from it.

I really like your instruments/samples and the composition; however, there needs to be a little more going on in some areas to keep people's attention.