I have to say, this just proves you could do a lot if you put your all into a single song. You can tell it sounds great, like mixed good and everything flowing together. You just need to put it into a song. Like an actual song. The only thing that stands out is the bass drum. It needs to blend in more. I think you should take what's here and put it in another full length track.

Haha. You know... your instrumentals are actually pretty awesome.

Your lyrics though... well... they're EVEN. BETTER.

Nice job