You've got some interest motifs. The only problem is that you've got a filter thing going on... which means you've got some mixing issues to sort out. It lacks clarity and that makes it extremely difficult to hear and difficult to differentiate between foreground and background elements.
A revisit at your mix would do this some good. Separate your instruments and your kit. You don't want things to blend too much... because then this kind of thing happens.
Practice makes perfect!
Thanks for all your feedback! I'm still fairly new to music production (I've only been doing it for a little over one year on an old version of garageband) I appreciate that you are telling me how to improve earlier on! Thanks! :)
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