There is so much variation in this song, andI don't think the song goes even 5 seconds with out something changing! But I wish you had more variety with the instruments and melodies. What I mean by wanting more variation in the melodies, I want to hear some higher or lower notes that still fit into the same melody. I don't really know how to further explain this. Do you remember my song that you reviewed, Under the Sun 2? The main melody had some higher notes in it just to add variation.
The break is excellent, but I wish it was slightly simpler, since the rest of the song is super complex
The fade out ending didn't sound bad, but it was disappointing. You could have at least not used the master channel for the fade out ending and did it to each instrument individually.