Hey im gonna say what i forgot below
now a real how you did from me :)
Looking on the melody:
Really this was all played in one chord changing time to time the key it was in. mostly in a perfect fifth type fo chord, but dont get me wrong its the most beautiful chord in music, which is b flat, f concert, and c concert (Which was actually discovered by pygathorean in his theories about proportions. Something like 2/3 a string and stuff hence forth, perfect. Something to do with ancient gods too....) and you added some notes onto the chord, maybe played with the key. My biggest problems were your transitions. not all of them but most of them. they seem too detached for the legato style they were in.
My pet peeve about this song HAS to be the first one is played like the composer of any song would; play it as written and play with it a little. this one is played by almost a different person it seems. a strait to the paper style.
O and please dont ignore me because im actually charing criticsm instead of praise.