Nice beat bro

The beat and rhythm line is very very nice, props for that. But you do need to work on your flow and try to annunciate a little better. If you're gonna insist on playing the bassline out for a long period of time then maybe you could put another melody over the top. And tbh I wasn't at all interested in the lyrics. But you've definitely got potential.

it was ok

you off to a decent start
but you need to work on you ability to flow from word to word
also where did you gfet the loop from
it was very catchy
keep trying dude
youll get there one day
if yuo so want to

Same as before.

Channel it alittle better, I don't like to hear the voice coming only from the left. It's good idea ya just need to work ont he little stuff like clarity and such. Put more effort into the "music".