It's a pretty good idea, but you don't really expand on it much. Yeah, the chorus sounds cool, and I need to get my hands on whatever bell synth that was, but the main part of the song is lacking some harmony. You have a basic melody and some drums, which is fine, but you can still add so much more. Try putting the chorus and bells and the string/drums together, and then work based on that. Change the tones to create both harmony and melody lines, while the bells and drums give it rythm.
You have really cool sounds, you just need to combine them. :)
Thanks you kindly! I haven't thought about expanding this but I think I might try it out. Like the description says, it was one of the first things I made that I turned into an intro to another song. Thanks for the tips, I never really thought about adding a harmony to the song. Originally the bell was going through the whole track and was fairly loud, but that got messed up. Anyways, The bell sound was FM Bell if you use FL Studio, I hope it brings you great happiness.
I gave it a 4/5 and 7/10.
The drums didn't really fit in so well. You should either drop them or maybe turn down the volume and use some other sounds.
Also, the part where it suddenly went louder could be at least turned down a littlebit.
You should also try adding some more instruments like voice, or violin or something like that which played at the same time. That would make it a bit more interesting.
Now that I've said what could be improved I'll say what I like about it.
I liked the instrument you used, it sounds pretty good and fits well with the song.
Even tho the drums could be better, it was still a nice touch to the song and gave it more life.
I also liked the voices or whatever it was, and the sound at the end which made looping it more interesting.
So overall a pretty good song. You should keep making melodies like this but make sure to do the improvements I told you and you'll get better. :)
Well thank you! I based it around a metal riff I made so I had originally intended to add guitars, but that didn't quite work out. There's a lot of things I'd like to improve, for example, it was supposed to have bells in it. I turned it into an intro for another one of my songs, but I hadn't really thought about adding to it. I might have to try it out. The .flp got messed up, so it'll be a challenge.