This has quite a lot of potential, but in my opinion you have a lot of work to do.
You cracked up the filter resonance on the drums and that really ruined it for me, especially when the kick/snare rushes came in - Why is this?. . Deal with that sound issue please.
Your drum patterns were actually good, and with the right sounds you could do get some really good sounding patterns.
Vocal things were good, no complaints there :3.
Melodic section seemed all over the place for me, I heard three different synths that didn't seem to go togethr at all (Choir/Low saw synth/High saw synth). I'll say the notes from the high synth (lead saw) were actually really good (loved the bends and stuff) and would sound better with different background synths.
In terms of leveling, at multiple times throughout the song I heard the audio clip, and that doesn't make good listening. .
I love Drum&bass, and I can't get enough of crazy patterns and stuff (seeing as it's my fave kind of music), but I didn't really think this was quite up to standard. You have the basic elements down, it's just a case of now building on that. Maybe try and listen some 'Des Plaines by Venetian Snares' to get a jist of what I'm trying to put accross.
It was a good attempt, for me it needs a lot of work. I hope you improve this and wow me. I can see my review is a lot harsher than the other club memebers, so maybe I'm just being extra picky seeing as 99% of what I listen to is D&B xD. If you don't get some of what I said, please feel free to PM me, I'd be happy to go over things with you :].
Anwar Louis ^_^
(Review Request Club)