Feedback prior to this seems so thorough I don't know what I could possibly contribute here... I'm enjoying the beat; new take on the classic, but does feel a bit basic somehow. The synth/piano improv bits in particular are kind of slow and sparse, and the background heartbeat-like percussion that comes in during the bridge maybe a little predictable? Maybe all it needs is really a bit more punch somehow, or a more atmospheric background layer like the original.

I can't be specific. Do nae know the musicalical technological terminologies at all but: still a blast to listen to. Smooth nostalgia.

-cd-

mew

You said this was a work in progress so I'll consider that but I'd like to say that sbb mostly hit the nail on the head for what I was thinking. A lot of your songs feature thin lo-fi sounds. That kit sounded nice at first with a few minor things out of it that got to me but once the other instruments came into the mix the kit lost a good bit of it's punch. I have a habit of liking really heavy kits and sounds so I'll admit that my opinions a bit biased but the instruments in this song sound really thin.

Now, I'm not sure if this will help at all but I noticed that when I turned up the volume on my monitors the sounds had more life to them. I'm not sure how low of an amplification your working with, but maybe you can get clearer sounds by turning your monitors down. My laptops speakers had a really nice sound to them... actually, everything sounded a hell of a lot better on my laptops speakers. That should never happen. I might recommend experimenting with different monitors, set ups and work spaces. You don't necessarily have to head out and grab new monitors. Just get another brand/size/set up to compare and master with. Sometimes just changing rooms will give you new acoustics to work with that can change everything.

Some of the more traditional aesthetic choices in melody and rhythm were interesting and nice. I can over look a mix I disagree with a lot of times when songs have hooks that transcend anal contemporary fetishisms. Really, those were some sassy drum fills and aux rhythms. You're melodic choices can be unconventional at times but in some cases that can work really well for you. I'm a hypocrite for pointing it out especially when thinking of this as an EDM track but I think that some of your melodies can explore further ranges. Play with jumping up an octave at the end of a repeated measure. Even something as simple as that can widen up a songs texture. Dunno.

Well, thats my two cents. Good luck with the rest of the work you got going. All the best sir!

kinda... cheap sounding

I think it needs much more work than just polishing, everything sounds muddy and harsh like midis from old rpgs, and I don't know how much mixing can help that. I notice that in a lot of your songs, really... you tend to use very thin lo-fi sounds a lot. But in this song they're especially cheap. Especially that piano bugs me.

I think what is really needed for this song is a different choice of instruments... smoothen things up a little, filter the sounds so they aren't as brittle, put some subtle sweeping modulation here and there, perhaps adding a reverb bus would do the trick. And I think in order to recreate anything like the mood of the original you should use sampled drum loops (ideally a bit mangled, with dirty compression and rolled off highs) instead of programmed drums, and most importantly get something that resembles the sweeping synth in the hook of the original song