If you're going to do metal
Do it properly. I think that you've tried too hard to get metal guitar and not drag the rest of the setup with you - everything needs to be metal, not just the guitar. The start is great, when it actually sounds like Parisienne Walkways, but when it gets to where the legendary 30s note hold crops up, or even just before, you decided to go a little mad with the guitar and with the drums staying as they were, you kind of had a duel going, which wasn't what you needed.
The held note needed to be something special and the scales that you were playing there really didn't cut it for me. More practice and you'll get there, but that wasn't what we were after.
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