lol, glad you liked it. And I like your response.
Thanks for the review, awsome666.
I have to say the melody felt very unique. The song felt extremely optimistic giving it a very jumpy/hoppy feel that isn't too much too my liking. I am wondering what this song would sound like with drawn out notes with an ambient feel. 1:25-1:30 did feel little too cluttered, but I the part that I liked the most was the crazy feel at 1:54. I think that this song feels like a piece of the story you are trying to tell, the "life is wonderful" feeling at the end of a song. I think you could definitely make it a full story by describing your life when you were in pain and then transitioning to this piece when your life was changing. That's all my opinion though. Music from the heart is something I feel shouldn't be changed if the composer thinks its finished. It's what makes us different, gives us the idea that we all have different ways of expressing ourselves. In the end, nice catchy melody. A little way too cartoony-happy for me (didn't seem too serious as I thought it would be), but I liked the original feel of it. 8.8/10 if you think you can do better, 10/10 if you think its done.
Lol, I know what you mean about, 1:25 - 1:30, but hell. This one is like a rediculous painting for me. The craziness is part of the artistry. It makes me want to laugh, but at the same time holds a message that is purely serious.
I appreciate your understanding of the artistic concept, too. I don't often get that (Although I often wonder if some people just use it as an excuse for crappy work... ). I'm glad you were able to look at it in that light.
Wow. I thought I'd never get around to responding to your review. I believe I just read your review and suddenly looked at this song in a new light... That was a cool experience.
Thank you for your thoughtful review, Denizenofnight.
this IS yr best work
you were right in the message you sent me in saying so and i think i might know why, i've noticed in a lot of wrk you seem to add a lot of everything which is kinda cool but i found that at about 1min 20secs the meledy gets rather muddled cause there's soooo much stuff happening. it's strange because for sewer jam the same thing happens and it's pretty sweet too. i don't know i guess i'm not musically inclined enough. thanks for telling me about it though, i thuroughly enjoyed it.
lol well I'm glad you liked it, bud. Yeah, it almost does sound muddled at 1:20, and it's something I was going to fix until I realised that the effect it gave in contrast to the very next section wasn't something I was about to give up.
Thanks for the review, kulg.
You did indeed let the work speak for itself, although, it seams that you really put your heart and soul into this piece, you really care about your girl, dont you?
It speaks of how much you care, without being overly imposed. You've made her a promise in this it seams, and its quite a loyal one.
Your chord progressions have a great amount of straightforwardness to them, but at the same time, make the song very enjoyable to listen too. Personally, I'd love to hear a middle voice more to it. It seams as if you've simply gotten yourself chords and a backround drumset, but nothing really making the piano anything important. It gives a base, but seemingly nothing more. My opinion only, but yes, it is very well done, and I enjoy it.
A middle voice... You might be right about that. I'll remember the suggestion for the next song I write, definitely, but this one I don't think I'm going to change - for obvious reasons. Nonetheless I found your input useful.
And yes... I really do care a lot.
Thank you for the review, Selene - both insightful and useful.
yeah, you're right
It is a great song, better than the other. Very good work ;P
Your song has something very special, that tell us that it's a unique song.
Very nice, continue in that way :)
Awesome, glad you liked it... yeah, Sewer Jam wasn't really my proudest moment. XP
"Has something very special..." ... Not sure what to say... Thank you, bobabibob.
...And I will indeed continue this way. ;)
Please contact me if you would like to use this in a project. We can discuss the details.