I like the genre and the mix was pretty decent, but the song kind of gets linear. It starts to go somewhere but then doesn't.

This is a great first draft I think.

OW MY EARS... the panning at the start gave me a headache after three seconds, and there's too much emptiness. WAYYYY too much emptiness, its like writing a sentence like this its annoying right? and almost no melody.

Great song! Just don't like the vocals. Probably because I didn't put in any vocals in my songs, but still great song otherwise!

bad.

but has slow buildup and the rythem just isn't good.

ur on ur way

u just gotta keep trying. its not terribly bad, but lacking in some areas...