"Just a little short of professional..."
Percussion IMO should not stop completely at :29 and 1:12... leave like a quarter note hi-hat or something.
I agree with Chron on maybe diversifying... at 1:45 a guitar solo would be much appreciated. The beginning and ending however, I feel are effectively simple.
Just a little short of professional... needs vocals, which I may or may not provide. :) Depends on how crappy I sound.