Not bad, got a few notes for you.

Make sure when you’re speaking louder, you adjust your gain. When you start speaking louder, you start to peak and audio distorts a bit. Either adjust the gain, or pull away a bit from the mic so your audio doesn’t go wonky.

You can definitely hear reverb in your audio. I’m not sure what your setup is like, but make sure you try to eliminate reverb from audio. It enhances the quality of your audio and makes it easier for audio engineers to work with.

Last bit, it was a bit tough to differentiate between the characters. I’m not sure if you were trying to do impressions or if you were just reading the lines in your own voice. If you were reading in your own voice, that’s fine!

I did enjoy the performance though and how you projected and emphasized certain parts of your delivery. Keep at it!

Hey, I'm a TFS fan as well. To review I'm not comparing you to them but as a voice actor. Your characters need a little more separation. While you are getting some of the characterization you voice sounds the same on all of them, just with differing levels of excitement. I'd work on changing pitch and enunciation.