This is a very nice song. I really love the beginning. The start was really good at hooking the listener in and building for a big chorus. For a lot of the middle parts of the songs, I felt that the instruments didn't do the drums justice. The percussion in this piece is amazing. 1:32, This part of the song began to fall off-beat with the drums which cause a bit of discomfort for the listener. A good thing to work on in the future is to have a less all-over-the-place melody. It would be good if you were to create great-sounding harmony beneath the melody so that you can go much bigger with your composition. At the moment in this piece, I'm hearing the bass play the same thing as the lead instrument (which is good for some cases). When you do this too much, it begins to lose effect. Maybe even simple background chords or a groovy bass line could help liven up this piece. Towards the end of your piece, you really kicked up the drums and made it ten times more groovy. Another thing that I would recommend you avoid is pausing too much in a piece. It's good maybe once or twice in a piece to give effect when it's done in the right places. But doing it too much could break the flow of the music. I know transitioning from one phrase to another can be challenging, but this is where you have to become really creative. Maybe slow down the piece and have an ascending scale leading up to the next phrase or even a quick drum solo. Or just change instantly as I do in my song Falire. Overall, very nice piece and I think you're taking a good step in the right direction with this piece. I'm not sure how much or this makes sense because it's getting really long and I'm not going to go back and check for grammar mistakes.