It's nice, but there is waaaay too much dialogue in those speech bubbles. You can add more panels to space out the dialogue, and use those panels to add more acting from the characters. The girl in pink seems like the kind of person to really get in your face while she's giving you the business, so don't just have her stand there. Basically, you're condensing too much into too few panels.
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Problem Child #213 - "Selfishly Selfless"
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“There's always something in it for the person who is allowing to be taken advantage of."
― P.A. Speers
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