Hrm...
If by artistic you mean an excuse for poor animation skills, okay.
The concept is good, you just need better skills at drawing and animation.
Try submitting it again when you get a better chance at it. Keep up the work. I really want to see this again once it gets better.
I know the animation wasnt 100% smooth, but how can you say my drawing wasn't good enough? The Park Slope houses look almost EXACT, and so does the Statue of Liberty. Well, thanks for watching, I guess.
Can I be honest?
Good.
It wasn't terrible. It wasn't even bad. But there's something that bothered me about it.
I think I have an idea of what sort of mood you were going for with this movie...a sort of sentimental look at NYC. The music set that up well, almost made it sad...but. This is where I have issues. Not with the sound..but with nit-picky things about the animation.
When you attempt an 'artistic view of the city' as you put it, it's a good thing not to confuse your viewers.
First...the planet that we zoom in on...is that earth? Why is it colored like the moon? (Tho, that might be an artistic choice, and if that's the case, so be it.)
I know that the rest of the style was your artistic choice. But there were details that were here and there, that stood out to me as a whole. When the bird is flying through the forest with the...egg-glowy-looking thing, there's a tree that disappears. Likely, it's just a frame that you missed in editing or whatever, but it stands out a lot.
This one..it's not an error, just a question (yeah, I'm going in chronological order here). When you have a representation of the Empire state building, what are the dotted lines supposed to represent? Again, I know that it's an artistic piece...but I'm just curious.
Okay...the ripples in the water. Having them come together instead of the opposite way (starting together and spreading out) just doesn't look right.
Statue of Liberty...very nicely drawn. Why the hell are the stars moving? Stars don't move. If it was meant to show movement in the background, then...well. Having them move together would have worked. Having them bounce around is just...nah.
My biggest pet peeve of this film: the falling leaves. Instead of the leaves actually falling...they moved up and down. Like the stars.
Yes, I know I'm being a picky woman. But this is what stood out at me, and what took away from the movie for me. It's why I only voted 2 for it. Maybe my standards are high. But it's not the art that I had an issue with...it was the scripting. The little details missed that messed with the continuity of the movie.
I'm done. :) All in all, it was good! Keep going. :)
Artistic view as in: NO boundaries, NO limits, ANYTHING goes. Isn't that what art is??? There's no right way to interpret art, and I don't think you understand that yet. Those dotted lines are supposed to represent city lights. Yes, I know stars don't move but you must understand, NY is a different city. It's practically a different world. Come and you'll see. For a beginner, your standards are way too high. I'd like to see you make a movie someday.
Anyway, I appreciated your review.
um, what was that?
that was all artistic an' all, but it wasn't that interesting. I like the song from Perfect Dark, tho. The bird looked kinda gay, but OL.
the only thing that's actually interesting these days is PORN, so maybe I should do that next time. I dont like birds, I think they're gay and all they do is shit on your head, but they're everywhere in NY, so...yea... Thanks anyway.
nothing
nothing really happened that you coulnd't sum up in one sentance, doesn't really live up to the name hellscorpion, heh. i was half expecting some kind of joke at the end, like the bird crapping on someone, that twist would of made it better. the only thing that saved it was the perfect dark music, heh.
ummm...
I thought you could have explained it better... Better luck next time.