Good but...
It's really good, but you should really check for balance of syllables in each group of sentences, it makes it more lyrical. Otherwise it's really good.
Reviews for "Virgil #3 If Only If"
Virgilcomic responds:
I'm not a very experienced poem writer. :-p Thanks for the suggestion, as it should help me improve my bizarre sense of rhythm.
Good job
I write poetry here and there, i really enjoyed this piece. very good.
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well i dont ushaly lisan 2 poatry but this was prittey good it told a good story about the man but the voce of the speker was messed i could barly under stand wat he was saying but other wiys it was a solad 7
Virgilcomic responds:
All apologies. I have found that good voice actors with good microphones are hard to come by on a budget.
Good
Normally people get stick for putting poetry on Newgrounds, and at first i thought this movie sucked, but as it went on it was really touching! And the part where qbout his wifes boobs was funny!
That was a good movie
A really touching movie.Keep it up.You can do it