For starters, the intro was great, grabbed my attention instantly and the story was mostly easy to follow. I do have a few things to point out. For the cgi sections, the models look a little too "shiny"( no experience with 3d animation so if that's normal ill let it pass), lack eyelashes, and differ in quality. The cgi "man in red" seems to have a higher quality clothing than hellnami whereas the priest looks lower overall. Animated parts looked rough, inconsistent in style and framerate and lip sync was off, a suggest would be to make the lines more clear, for example the shark skull at the beginning and the brief view of the blonde man in glasses look wonderful. For the lip sync, you could look at yourself in a mirror or film your mouth while reading the script and use it as reference when animating. Finally the background (static?)noise from recording the voices of your characters stand out when there's no music playing, this could be because i'm wearing earphones but try to get rid of it.
Reviews for "Hellami Animated Series Episode 1 "Hellami""
The 3d models or characters are always in the midst of improving, it will look better in later ep. Sometimes it is made to look less detail for example Hellami's face which I think looks better when it is simple. The lip sync does need more practicing. I didnt notice the static noise, they probably came from the old recordings of the 2d flash part. Thanks for your review :)
The 3d animation was pretty good, but the 2d animation was pretty inconsistent between being pretty decent to just being still-frames with a moving mouth. At times it feels pretty cliched, like as if it wants to be a RUBY or a Hellsing, but kinda fails being both. This is just the first episode though. I'm anticipating for the next episode!
The series is partially inspired by hellsing but it is not trying to be that. The 2d part is from a older existing shots which could be the reason why it is not as polish. Hope you will find the later episodes be better :)
I'll call here Salami, because I love sausages, it's not the wurst thing to do am I right?
This seems mildly interesting, but mostly it looks horrible, but what can I say the animation style isn't my thing but I can tell it took a lot of effort to make. Other than that, I enjoy the voice acting even if the script is a bit lacking and uninteresting, just the lack of interesting stuff in this is gonna make me watch the next one, other than all this I find it really good, basic plot seems good enough, the unwilling partner, the fact that she keeps some forbidden secret, even though the script and storytelling here is lacking, it somehow peaks my interests in how you are going to make this story excel, with it's incredibly slow pace and lack of content, but it might be what intrigues me as I'm unfortunately a sucker for slow paced dramas.
Oh and sound quality and all that shit is top notch.
The animation reminds me of RWBY and the Boondocks the designs are definitely interesting, the camera angles are well done, reminding me a bit of Hellsing- like the tapping on the desk where the camera angle is to someone's fingers. The slow pace of the movie mixed with the detective-type music made it boring at times, kind of like if I was watching Death Note. The background design is okay. The shadows and lighting are good as well as the reflections, but the story feels slow, the voice acting needs a bit more emphasis when the lines are delivered, I can kinda hear the characters, but there still is a monotone undertone to them. Some animations like 3:34 took away from the vibe you were probably going for as it looked too animated, like a comic. I could see where you were going with that, but still, that animation looked hilarious, not sure if you wanted it to be, but mixed with the heavy music, that just made me laugh I'm not really sure where you're going with this series as it seems like an animation inspired by a combination of tons of anime made into a new series
Not bad. I can tell that you have potential to get much better, but there are various improvements that can be made to this. Firstly, the usage of both 2D and 3D art is a little jarring, I suggest choosing and sticking to one. Also, while the art itself isn't bad, the animation lacks fluidity. It feels really stiff, almost as if you're just jumping between key frames without really imagining the movement as one complete motion. The lip-syncing could use some work as well.
But it's not all bad, there are some nice moments here. You have a good directing style, and I can see what you want to convey. It's just that you're having a bit of trouble actually getting it across. The story felt pretty simple, but it isn't uninteresting. The premise is nice, but the characters weren't fleshed out. To be frank, they were boring, but given the length of the short you did what you could. I suggest focusing more on individual characters rather than exposition.
For example, instead of opening with the priest you could have open with Hellami, whom seems to be the main character of this whole show. You could have used her to introduce the Redies, who George is, and various other pieces of exposition while also showing what her personality is through her descriptions of the people. I understand that you want to keep her mysterious, but without a character of some sort to relate to, the audience will feel detached from the story.
I enjoyed the short, and hope to see your work improve in the future. For now, Hellami gets a 3.5/5.
I agree that the animations still need more work but i made a choice of doing the new scenes rather than improving the old ones. I like to see the big picture since it is a animated series.
This episode is meant to introduce the series and the plot. I do like to flesh out Hellami & the other characters more but it will be too 'overwhelming' to have all in one episode. Hellami will have her own in depth story in a later episodes.
You provided good points and I am glad that you enjoy this episode :D I will definitely keep improving the series.