I would say this is a very mixed bag for me. I think at times there are moments of clarity, and I understand exactly what you're going for, and at other times, I am not sure how you want me to feel at all. Though a similarly awkward style of humor and execution is present compared to your last round, I will say, this rounds entry is refreshingly different, and I feel as though you likely took some risks with this. Though the ending left me wanting something a little more concrete, I think a lot of ideas and parts in this are great, and I hope you keep on experimenting as you go.
Reviews for "Only the Happy Thoughts"
jlorp responds:
Honestly the critical feedback you've given me has been helpful and I really appreciate it. I really want to keep exploring more writing styles, as far as plot goes. My jokes (I think) will always be in that awkward nervous delivery, that's just my awkward nervous personality showing through my work. The pacing and delivery of a real story is something I've never really learned, or been taught by anyone. It's not something that comes so naturally to me, but hopefully something starts clicking soon. Thanks again for the critique, the honest feedback is great. I'm excited to see what you put out this round.
It was great to see a new NATA thing. I will admit that this seemed a bit too long. It was still very creative. I'm glad that you created something we can all associate with. Well, just those who take meds. Then again, that probably is most of us.
These guys looked like deformed Muppets. I'm not sure what the intention was. The bits with the spider was quite good. The voices seem quite realistic. It's sort of experimental.