I don't even know what to say here. I guess I'll just start with what I saw. First, there were a lot of grammar and spelling errors, but I'm far from an English major to care, but there were enough I wanted to point it out. The story is a little slow at first, and it will drive people away. That alone is a real shame, I have to admit, this actually brought a tear to my eye, even if I knew where this was going about halfway through, it was done so well! My suggestion to you, when doing a visual novel like this, add an auto play option, and when adding multiple endings, have a replay or choose again option at the end. Saves from having to refresh the page and load it again. But other then that, I want to Thank You very much for this. It made me feel for today, and I don't usually like to, but today it was good. Yeah, today it was good!
Reviews for "Beyond Darkness"
Well damn. That was a powerful story. The dialogue errors and mix-ups were annoying (the coffee shop scene had a very confusing one) but not a huge deal overall. The creepy parts had just the right amount of suspense, not jump-scares like I was expecting, and the plot twists towards the end were mind blowing as well.
Without going to detail why (spoilers would ruin the suspense and "mind-f*ck"), I honestly preferred Ending 2. Either way the reader chooses, it's a sad but sweet tale that makes the characters real and tempts another read-though... Much respect to you!!
Such a wondrfull story! I can't wait to see what's the other ending!T.T
i had a good time :)
may i know the word count of this novel :) ?
Typo when the doctor arrives to check up on her. it should say reported but instead says reproted