like the idea and animation. a few things good use some extra attention but its one of the better animations i have seen in the past few days.
Reviews for "Shattered Heaven Ep. 1"
AdamTilford responds:
Thanks. Yeah, there's still a lot for me to handle. I'm overall happy with this as it's a big improvement from my previous animations. A lot of the issues I'm working on improving for the next episode.
I thought it was pretty damn great. Can't wait for some real fights. My only real issue is the audio. It ranged from soft to blaring. If you can normalize it before you put it all together, it should sound more consistent. Keep up the good work.
I have a couple of questions:
I haven watched them, but I also are not all to motivatzed to spend the time researching it, but: There are a hell load of videos of you since 2008 about this series. Is this the remake? The intro is the story that passed by in the first series, eh? Interessting. Surely the story has potential. I concure though that you have to improve the character development and the voices to make it intersting enough to follow it.
You should check out this series. http://www.newgrounds.com/portal/view/116666 Flash selfmade y someone who started less skillfull as you are right now, but the dramatics are just better. The characters are shown one at a time, the sounds are confident and suit the atmosphere and the viewer is motivasted to watch even though some huge animationflaws
Though I enjoy the lenghts of the conversation in the party. It takes alot of bravery to make such a long conversation. And hell yea, I really do. Dramatirgicly you should consider though that you can start small. Littler bits af information and some riddles to the charactes. Maybe consider let the viewer dive slowely thourgh them, not let the characters introduce them entirly and then look where they leed. But well. Consider and make your choises.
AdamTilford responds:
Chronologically, this takes place before the previous ones. This follows the first novel. The first series I started with was a sequel to the 3rd book. It was stupid to present something visual to a new audience without explaining the characters. But I look at it as practice at animating since I'm a writer, not an animator. I'm aware of Xin. This episode is really the only episode like this, I should have cut out some of the character interactions, but what's done is done. And I am happy with how this came out overall as it's a big improvement to how I used to animate.
The intro is pretty much the prologue from the actual book, it's more of a history of the world that they're in. But there's a lot of reasons as to why it's set up as it is. Since this is based off of a novel, everything is already set up and I'm not writing things as I go. While it is mecha, and there will be plenty of action, it is a character drama. Where it's shown how they start off and how they change and grow to where they end up by the middle and end of the series. Only 2 characters really had development or introductions in this episode, Adam and Amy since their conversation had the most actual depth. While there were others introduced, they were just sort of, there as foreshadowing for future things.. The issues that were present in this episode won't be in the following ones. I feel like the first episode was the biggest hurdle to get over.
This has some really good potential, i can't wait to see how this expands and evolves :) I would say to make each episode a little shorter, but you did needed to introduce the history and and stuff so thats understandable. I would also attempt to make the characters as unique as possible when you animate them, especially in the female characters, they all just lose a bit of personalisation compared to the still at the end.
However, i know how tough it can be creating such in depth and lengthy content, and you've got a one-up on me because you're actually producing content. So once again, i can't wait to see how you, and this animation evolves :D Good Work :)
I agree with some of the other comments, I'd like to know my characters before I'm flooded with more, but either way I think this is off to a decent start. I wont comment on the art because if you're working on it and improving there is nothing I have to say. The character Mike's voice makes me laugh but it starts to bother me as much as Yugi's voice did after hearing him for a while, but I wouldn't want it changed because his voice and way of speaking does make him unique in terms of speech, but it can be toned down a little bit, at times. Another thing about the characters is that I'd like to see some character development later on in the story. This sure as hell does have potential, and y'know, I've always been kind of a mech guy so I'll definetely continue to watch this :P. Keep working hard, I want to see a dramatic story, epic fights and tragic deaths. By the way the ending of this kind of reminded me of Gundam Seed, especially the outfits the people had on in the last picture.
AdamTilford responds:
There will be tragic stuff. I just didn't want to start out with all of that. Kinda wanted to show the main character now as unassuming and then you can see his growth. I suppose it could be comparable to Seed's endings, but I really came up with what I wanted to do out of nowhere. Probably could have been subconsciously inspired by Seed but it wasnt a direct intent. Characters get cut down in the following so it's more focused. Should have done that to begin with but oops