a C isn't that bad and its just like all ur other films great so keep up the good work.
Reviews for "Solo (NATA)"
Pahgawk responds:
Thanks! ...and yeah, I guess so. I come from a sort of sheltered school where people think they failed if they get below 90% :P
Very good!
I shall only point out two things that could be improved:
First, the voices: both acting are good, and I had not noticed the background noise, but at some times, especially during the "classroom" scene around 1:25, they were a bit difficult to hear and understand over the music.
Secondly, the bus's movements could have been better. around second 55, the fact that the wheels didn't move was pretty noticeable; and the motion was quite unnatural: mainly at second 55, but also the 1st time, the movement is too linear, and lacks the "forward-down" momentum-induced motion of the cabin as it weighs on the shock absorbers when the bus slows to a stop
watching it again, I also noticed a detail that I think should be mentioned: about 2:20, the lights coming through the bus window (which also appear to be the movie's icon) applies as if on a flat surface and not voluminous bodies.
apart from that, I found nothing worth notice that could have been made better, and can only say: congratulation for such an excellent work! the style you used for the backgrounds was in my opinion very well adapted for the animation you did, as was the music and were the voices of your characters. The "disappearing" motions in the end were pretty pleasant to watch, as was the whole of the animation, in fact. Once again, congratulations
Pahgawk responds:
Thanks! And yep, you picked up on my little bits of laziness. I accidentally drew the bus all on one layer, and being me, rather than going back to do the wheels separately I just left it as-is. Same with the shadow thing. Laziness on my part. Oops :P Glad you liked the video though!
neato.
But kind of abrupt. I guess that's what happens when you make a short film, but it was like, "here's all this stuff" and then "pop! you win!"
I'd like to see more of the imaginary friend character: What he's thinking through it, If he's bored in the padded room, If he feels neglected having to stand next to the bed all night, how he feels to be ignored.
I think this is okay but would have been better if the story were told over the course of a couple of days. This seems like one mediocre (not even bad) day, and suddenly the Dramatic! retreat into one's self. (I can't get over the sudden "Bad End")
But that would ha e been like, three times the work, and I'm not animator. For what it is, it's pretty good. I'd prefer to see this in live action. Vote to save with a full four stars, but I wouldn't watch it again "for fun".
Pahgawk responds:
True. I guess there's a pretty fine balance between over- and under-ambitious plots when you only have a month to make the video. I'm trying to get back into the habit of using actual characters who represent themselves and not characters that are metaphors. Turns out normal people need some depth. All part of the learning experience, I guess. I'll try to take it into account next time. Thanks!
You never stop surprising me, awesomely well done man !!
great job. i love the animation style